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my first poem...Discuss my first poem... at the English Poetry; ...okay i dont know if it is good... or if it is worth posting...but here ... |
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12-22-2007, 08:24 AM
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my first poem...
...okay i dont know if it is good... or if it is worth posting...but here it is...
The first time I trusted you And you broke it, along with my heart How it feels? Like someone stabbed my heart Do you have any idea what you did to me? You killed my soul, this body is living with out a soul Can’t you tell I’m dead inside and it’s all cause of you How can I trust someone else? When the one I loved lied to me You killed me inside Yet it’s hard to move on It's hard to let you go It’s hard to not love you anymore Y is that y cant I move on, y cant I let go? *closes her eyes n' crosses her fingers* so what do you think? be honest! Last edited by s_i_r_f__t_u_m; 12-22-2007 at 08:41 AM. 
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12-22-2007, 08:45 AM
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expressed in a zabardast way..i liked the way u wrote that...to be honest...
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12-22-2007, 08:49 AM
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Thanx!!!
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12-22-2007, 10:29 AM
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keep writing...
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12-22-2007, 10:35 PM
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lol... i will...wen sumthin comes in mind...
um... yeah im trying to move on...
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