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  Discuss Ek hawa ka jhoka. at the Original Urdu Poetry; hey frendz this is really written by me. Ek hawa ka jhoka. itni khubsurat thi ...

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Old 04-18-2007, 06:43 PM
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Wink Ek hawa ka jhoka.

hey frendz this is really written by me.

Ek hawa ka jhoka.

itni khubsurat thi meri zindagi
aur bohut khush thi mein
phir meri zindagi mein thori pareshaaniyan ayi
jo waqt k rehte sehel ho gai
magar phir achanak
aya ek tufaan jo ek hawa k jhoke se le gaya meri khushiya aur de gaya mujhe gam hi gam
wo hawa ka jhoka aisa tha jo na kabhi kisi ne socha na dekha hoga
wo tha ek hawa ka jhoka jis mein meri sameti huwi zindagi pal bhar mein bikhar gai
wo ek lamha aur meri zindagi bas tham k reh gai
na tha koi mujhe is mushkil se nikaal ne wala
na koi is mushkil ko samajh ne wala
magar kyu aisa lagta tha k koi aaye ga
is hawa k jhoke se aane wali mushkil ka hal batane
aur ek din is umeed ki ek jhalak dikhai di
aur wo insaan ek hawa k jhoke se aaya meri zindagi mein
mera haath thaama, mujhe dilasa diya aur meri mushkil ka hal bataya
aur ho gai meri zindagi pehle jaisi khubsurat aur khushali wali

bas ek hawa k jhoke k sath!
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Old 04-18-2007, 06:45 PM
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wow ! superb !

thanks for sharing
but don't u think it shud be in poetry section
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simply... great one...thanks 4 sharing...

its right place is in original poetry section...
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Old 04-20-2007, 01:02 AM
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Its ok

but quite rankly its not upto the mark
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Old 04-21-2007, 03:28 PM
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hey dont get me wrong that m angry on u but wht do u mean by not upto the mark
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Old 04-21-2007, 03:29 PM
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thanks khawab n rahen.
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what i meant your one sentence (misra) is normal but the secind one is tooo long, so try to keep it a bit short (compare 1 & 6) and i dont know why i doont find it interesting dont get me wrong, i dont mean to hurt any 1. but i told, what i felt.
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u r not wrong but there r paragraphs in the whole thing n that i have not done.
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