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Ek hawa ka jhoka.Discuss Ek hawa ka jhoka. at the Original Urdu Poetry; hey frendz this is really written by me. Ek hawa ka jhoka. itni khubsurat thi ... |
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04-18-2007, 06:43 PM
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Ek hawa ka jhoka.
hey frendz this is really written by me.
Ek hawa ka jhoka. itni khubsurat thi meri zindagi aur bohut khush thi mein phir meri zindagi mein thori pareshaaniyan ayi jo waqt k rehte sehel ho gai magar phir achanak aya ek tufaan jo ek hawa k jhoke se le gaya meri khushiya aur de gaya mujhe gam hi gam wo hawa ka jhoka aisa tha jo na kabhi kisi ne socha na dekha hoga wo tha ek hawa ka jhoka jis mein meri sameti huwi zindagi pal bhar mein bikhar gai wo ek lamha aur meri zindagi bas tham k reh gai na tha koi mujhe is mushkil se nikaal ne wala na koi is mushkil ko samajh ne wala magar kyu aisa lagta tha k koi aaye ga is hawa k jhoke se aane wali mushkil ka hal batane aur ek din is umeed ki ek jhalak dikhai di aur wo insaan ek hawa k jhoke se aaya meri zindagi mein mera haath thaama, mujhe dilasa diya aur meri mushkil ka hal bataya aur ho gai meri zindagi pehle jaisi khubsurat aur khushali wali bas ek hawa k jhoke k sath! 
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04-18-2007, 06:45 PM
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wow ! superb !
 thanks for sharing  but don't u think it shud be in poetry section
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04-18-2007, 07:08 PM
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simply...
 great one...thanks 4 sharing...its right place is in original poetry section...
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04-21-2007, 03:28 PM
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hey dont get me wrong that m angry on u but wht do u mean by not upto the mark
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04-21-2007, 03:29 PM
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thanks khawab n rahen.
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04-21-2007, 04:02 PM
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what i meant your one sentence (misra) is normal but the secind one is tooo long, so try to keep it a bit short (compare 1 & 6) and i dont know why i doont find it interesting dont get me wrong, i dont mean to hurt any 1. but i told, what i felt.
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04-21-2007, 06:03 PM
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u r not wrong but there r paragraphs in the whole thing n that i have not done.
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05-25-2007, 06:52 PM
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thanks sonhal
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