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Thread: A Good Poem I wrote.. I want u to see if they are good..Plea

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    Hi Guys

    I wrote a poem for my girl friend

    let me know if u like it

    The Dreams which You have To Desire
    Are all those for which I aspire
    The Pettels of the Rose
    Just tell me You are the house of love
    A Love which Undying Defines me
    It completes me It Reminds me
    It makes me realise what I am
    Its a feeling I have never felt
    And It Makes my heart melt
    The Way in which You smile
    You are the one who will walk a mile
    With me together We will Conquer!
    For Us Awaits a Journey to be Started
    A Journey Which Will Define the Ethics
    Ethics of Pure Love Carved in Ivory
    Which Even the Gods Will crave for!
    For You are... The one whome I love
    And whome this heart feels as One
    You are the one who makes me leap into the sky
    in hopes to fly Even I fail I do Leap Its because of you
    Because you are the dream A Dream Unconquered
    You are immortal Not a Human being Your soul is
    A Beauty in itself Its Not Mixed with Lust,Hatred Pride
    its Blended in Gold And Heavenly Jewels!
    They Find themselves Honoured to be crafted on thy crown
    For thee are Life In a human form!
    A Miracle Waiting to be unleashed A Miracle which may sense
    as a Normal Thing for the outside world but for this Cold Hearted
    Human Being You are God, You are Life
    For thee is whome I live for For whome I will die
    For thee is whome I would Love all my life!

    LOve they say is Very might and vast
    They say it cant be equalled
    Love is the connection of souls
    Well I say it gives your heart holes
    Love they say is a matter of pride
    I say Hey mac step aside let me go by
    Love is victories of victories
    Love they say cant be defeated
    Love they say is Holy and pious
    I say Oh My god...Why are these couples so suspicious?
    They say Love is not lust
    I say Yes true thats what both of them ask first
    They say Love is Filled with Flowers and fruits
    I say Love is a mischief which should be cut from the roots
    They say Love is like the rain.. Clear and Magnificient
    I say Love is a Khichadi Which is made very efficient
    They Say when you love you are not afraid
    I say Yeah baby..Now i know why countless couples Escape
    They say People envy Love as they are jealous
    I say Wow People You are so genrous
    They Say Love Doesent needs looks or riches
    I say Hmm if thats the case why do girls shift boy friends every other hour?
    They say first love cant be Erased
    I say True But why to write such a phrase?
    They Say COuntless Immortals have died in love
    I say Thank god The population was Balanced becasue of them
    They ask me Did you ever Love You hearted cold
    I say to them with a tear in my eyes
    I was Loved by the clouds But then I loved the rain
    I was Loved by the flowers But then i loved the tree
    I was Loved by the sunshine But then I loved the moon
    I was Loved By You...But then I never Loved anyone else.



    As you walk on the Virgin Sands of the beach
    The Treese give u solacle with their breeze
    The sun gives you Shade in its grace
    He asks you who art thou the eternal light
    You Body is wrapped in the silent silks
    You walk on where the honey dew milks
    The silent pace in which you trend
    makes the coming grasses offend
    They wait for your grace upon them
    Like the grace of the monsoon for the farmers
    You are life in many ways unknown unreasoned
    The 16 year old Blossoms in hearts of millions
    For some thy art inspiration to work
    for some to live,For some to survive
    For thy word speaks the untruth of evil
    the unkindness of the sin
    The Silent pace at which you steal away
    No wealth can bribe No prayers persuade to stay

    Saying thanks wont hurt

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    Big and tall was the mountain before me,
    Rising from the depths of the blue sea,
    Overhanging above the wide, wide earth,
    Teetering about its own huge girth.
    How I longed to reach its peak and
    Eye the world and all its land,
    Rivers and valleys, the hill and the plain,
    Downs of Australia,plateaux of Spain,
    Everything that stretches across the shore
    And goes on for miles and miles and more.
    Rolling blue oceans with their waves so high;
    Yearned I to view what lay far and nigh.
    Oh so high and higher I would go,
    Up above where the fleecy clouds flow.
    All of a sudden crashed over me a
    Realization that was so very bitter:
    Early in my youth, when I was full of life,
    When I knew no worry, no struggle nor strife,
    One accident had I, forget it I shall never;
    Now it has left me maimed and crippled for ever.
    Down poured my tears without hindrance,
    Even as I saw someone looming in the distance.
    Right up to me came he, holding out his hand,
    Flashing a smile at me, he helped me up and
    Up the majestic mountain he led me. A
    Light of hope was he; I call him Brother.
    This was written by sister for me!

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    The serene night with u comes to an end
    with my death the sunlight rose upward to ammend
    every past every moment recoiled in this stone heart
    broke up like the vessels of a Indian clay mart
    i lay by your arms,awaiting death a poor mans joke
    my mind takes me to the time immortal
    where i was once a free man with no story to tell,
    u made this life a heaven from my past hell,
    thou gave me nothing, nor did i give u anything,
    love for once i despised as cowardice,
    i played my life as it were pieces of dice
    awaiting my death in ur arms for no reason why,
    a life without u is like a imprisoned bird waiting to die
    we ran together for 7 years, years of hope,
    years of freedom,years of love and joy,
    then suddenly u said i was a dumb boy,
    love turned into deceit, Candies into hard hitting words
    flowers turned into urns,dreams turned into dust,
    Why .. is the question. i ask as my last wish,
    you could not see me in my eye,
    your body was filled with sin,bloody sin,
    that thousand perfumes of rome wouldnt wipe out,
    I faced death twice once by the hands of the almighty,
    other from thy hands filled with contempt.
    on the way , Satan asks me you fool why did u go to her?
    I stood speechless thinking u were a heaven in my hell.
    let those who love ye be reminded, A man who loves faces death twice
    Once at the hands of his enemies, once from his own hands

    This is the next one.. I hope u like it!

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    its like...heart is written on the paper...but seems like u r more than that for them...really lovely...:up;...i m moving this thread to original poetry section where all self written poems are cherished.



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    you write very good...great work!
    ~Ye Dard Ka Tufaan Guzra kyu nahi..Dil Toot Gayaa Hai To Bikhra kyu nahi..Ek Hi Shakhs Ko Chahta Hai kyu Itna..Koi Dusra Is Dil Me Utarta kyu nahi~

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